The above link talks about the fact that many Americans had prejudice against Muslims. This was like what happened in The Merchant Of Venice, where Christians were prejudice against Jews.
The above links shows how Abu Dahbi helped Dubai by giving Dubai 10 million dollars when Dubai was desperate for help. This case was similar to the case in The Merchant Of Venice, when Bassanio needed money from Antonio to woo Portia. In the case of Dubai, Dubai and Abu Dhabi were on close terms, and when Dubai needed help to repay debts and avoid bankruptcy, Abu Dhabi helped her. Both cases show how friends would help each other in times of need, showing how financial problems can be solved through friendship.
The story:
Henry's parents were killed in a car accident. Some say the accident was deliberate, but almost everyone felt that they deserve it, because a Jew and a Christian should never have married. Now, Henry could only turn towards his Uncle, who was the only person that accepts Henry and treats him like a human being.
The first day living with his uncle was great. His uncle brought him around their houses and spent the day with him, enjoying. He felt happy, a feeling that was like a stranger to him.
The second day arrived, his uncle went for work, and his aunt became the ruler of the house. "You filthy creature, with half the blood of a Jew, better wake up your idea about life here! You have ruined the purity of the Christian blood and you are worst than my dog! If not for your uncle, I would have killed you and feed the dogs of Jews, as you don't even deserve to be eaten by the dogs of Christians! I am tired of scolding animals! You think you can relax here? Go wash our clothes now!" Henry nodded in fear.
Henry knew how to wash clothes. He had been washing clothes from young. Suddenly, his aunt kicked him in the face. "Who told you to wash clothes using our washing machines? Who told you to wash clothes using detergent? Don't touch these stuff! You have your hands so wash using them!Feeling angry, Jew? If you hate it, then get of of my house!" Henry cried, only to receive another kick.
Lunchtime came and the other kids were having lunch. Henry went to his aunt and asked, "May I have a bowl of rice please?" His aunt slapped him. "Can't you see our dog's poo? They are your lunch. If you don't like, don't eat!"
Dinnertime came, and Henry ate dinner, the first meal of the day. When he placed the spoon of porridge into his mouth, tears just flowed out of his eyes uncontrollably. The taste of porridge, pure porridge, have never felt so pleasant in his life. Every single grain in the porridge was beyond description.
During bedtime, thanks to his uncle's presence, Henry was able to lie on a bed. However, he could not sleep. He thought to himself, "Why should I be treated like this? I am, like Christians, a human being. I feel hungry when starved, scared when scolded and upset when isolated. Why should I suffer the life of a slave? Why should my relatives, the closest ones to me treat me like an animal, like a prisoner, like a Jew?" With that, tears started flowing down his eyes. Burying his head under a pillow, he whispered, "Why must my mother be a Jew?..........."
I feel that the story was well written. It is a simple story, that is easy for any reader to understand. The theme is expressed in a clear manner, and you were able to convey your messages well. However, I feel that you can have more descriptive parts in your story to leave a deeper impression to your reader. Also, adding such part to your story can help you to develop your story.
ReplyDeleteI will also like to make a suggestion that you can explain why Henry's uncle treat Henry so well. There could be more thoughts and feelings of Henry when facing such mistreatments from his aunt.
However, in conclusion, I feel that the story is still well written.
I feel that the story was well written, as it goes straight to the point. It also clearly states the prejudice shown in the examples.
ReplyDeleteHowever, i feel that you could have used more sensory details. Also, i feel that instead of: Day 1,2, Lunch , Dinner and bedtime, i feel that you should have focused on 2 or 3 specific scenes and then elaborate on it.
Keep it up! :)
Alex Peng 2P418